Flash Jabez

 


I had not heard of the term flash fiction before I joined ACW, although I had consumed many short stories. It has been encouraging to read about members who enter competitions and have these short pieces published. There is a real poetic craft in communicating depth while keeping the word count short.

How short?

As short as you like. According to legend, Ernest Hemingway wrote the following famous six-word short story:

"For sale: baby shoes, never worn."

Tight and poignant indeed, whoever composed it.  

You might also want to try your own minimalistic six-word story, or perhaps aim for a little more information with a 50-word mini saga. Twitterature is a great portmanteau term for a 280-character story fit for Twitter. If you have a good one, post it in the comments.

Flash fiction refers to stories of only 1000 words; short, but sufficient space for structure, emotion and key elements and to allude to a rich narrative and possible twists. It is an art. I often mark 1500-word essays. Students struggle to eliminate words when they want to make a good case or to demonstrate the range of their reading and thinking. Exercising restraint is hard.

But there is a real pedigree in tight writing. Hebrew narrative is wonderfully minimalistic, for example. While David, Moses and Noah get lots of column inches, the people with a tight little tale fascinate me just as much. And they leave more questions.

Have you heard of Jabez? His tiny story is found in 1 Chronicles 4:9-10. In the space of these two verses (35 words in Hebrew) we learn that he was named after his painful birth, prays to God for blessing, for enlarged territory, for God’s hand to be with him and to be kept from harm and free from pain. And in an abrupt denouement, we learn that God does just that.

But hang on… who exactly was Jabez, and why is this strange story not also in the Samuel-Kings history? What blessings did God give him and where exactly was his territory? In what ways was God with him? Are we to emulate him? How far?

The story does tell us all it needs to, but it also begs something from the reader or listener; how might this apply to me? Am I supposed to react a certain way, or learn a lesson here?

There was a frenzy of interest and slick marketing in Jabez in the year 2000. It’s not hard to see why: the prayer invites unpacking, and some people started used the words as a mantra, along prosperity gospel lines. This is how a good story turns sour. God loves us and we should ask and seek for good things from him (Matthew 7:7-8, Luke 11:9-10), but life has taught me that my personal and material desires are not more important than my relationship with God and how I serve and love others. If Jabez was praying for blessing for himself and for release from pain, we don’t hear about what he did for others, how those around him were impacted by his prayers and the consequences or whether he left any other kind of legacy.

Like other remarkable short stories, the little we know about Jabez hints and teases. It leaves us pondering. Like much Old Testament narrative, extra information is not revealed, and yet we do have enough to work with. God blessed this guy, who was bold enough to ask him for blessing. His pain was turned to power. In a brilliant literary irony, his territory is enlarged with very few words.

What about you?

Do you stop and think about the short stories you read? What biblical examples have you come across that leave you asking more questions? And have you tried composing flash fiction?

If you write, I pray that as you work on your craft, you discover your writing territory enlarged. May God remove those boundaries which prevent you from serving him. In all your writing - long or short - may you be a true blessing to others. 

 


Lucy Marfleet loves reading, laughing, her husband’s cooking, walking her dog and marvelling at how tall the kids are getting. She teaches Biblical Studies for Spurgeon’s College on their Equipped to Minister course and has a Masters in Theology from the International Baptist Theological Seminary. See her blog at www.lucymarfleet.com



Comments

  1. A flash story reveals Jabez's world.
    A snippet that says so much.

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  2. So enjoyable and educational as always, Lucy. I've never written flash fiction, but I admire those who can. I've just finished my first book of short stories and was racing to reach 50,000. Once I had, though, I went through with a fine tooth comb, taking out any word which wasn't necessary. Tight stories are the best, it's true.

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  3. My favourite of all in the Bible has to be the story of Eutychus, the young man who falls out of the window listening to Paul's sermon and then gets resurrected. I wrote a poem in his honour when I did a talk about him at church.

    I’m comforted by Eutychus
    to find that he is one of us.
    Asleep, he falls without a push
    when Paul the preacher will not shush.
    This poem’s an ode to him becauss,
    though dead and gone, that Eutychus
    gets resurrected with no fuss.
    I think that makes him Euty-plus.

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  4. Andrew Marfleet21 March 2023 at 11:25

    I've always felt for the poor man in Ecclesiastes 9:14-15 who saves a city by his wisdom - "but nobody remembered that poor man". Jabez gets named; this guy only has a story.

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  5. Lovely post Lucy! Jabez has become a name for many examples on themes such as name change,circumstance change, status change, askimg boldly, relationship with God, etc. His story will do well for Biblical fiction writing. Lovely comments from ACWers motivated by your post! Blessings.

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